I hope you don't mind the idea of someone you've never met giving you a critique <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> I just felt that, if you put in the work to do something this extensive, I might as well give you more than a sentence or two on what I think.

The first thing I'll start on is the artistic side. Obviously, the art itself is very well done; it looks like Toriyama's style... as far as the box that it's put in today. I can't say I'm a fan of the heavily sharp and vector-esque choices the DragonBall team uses for everything DB nowadays. I much prefer a more natural feel akin to the Cell Saga and such. But it does look clean, and you did it justice in every way.

However, one important thing to note is the lack of originality in the pose. Whether to speed up the process, or simply because you don't have the skill yet to craft an original pose on such a high level (and I'm sure it's the former, as your gallery proves you have a lot of talent), it still doesn't change the fact that it detracts from the overall feel slightly. We both know that many people vector-trace stuff all of the time, and slap their own hairstyle and color scheme on it. So it's unfortunate that a work that's as high quality as this will probably get lumped in with most of them simply because it doesn't look very original from the outset because of the pose.

Now, on to the actual work itself, and the character in question. I have no problem with anything you've said here as far as backstory goes. It's far from cliche and gary-stu, because you kept it so simple. It's clear that there's much more to this character than what you've written here, so that assumption could be wrong. But I'm basing this on what I read here and only here. Therefore, the basic premise of the character is a-okay.

I struggle to believe that he should be able to go SSJ3 or 4, as it's clear in the canon that this hasn't been done for any of the extent of known Saiyan history, outside of maybe the Original SSJ. That's the type of thing that feels forced and out of place, because it doesn't make sense unless he's from an age WAY passed... in which case he couldn't have the Saiyan armor, because it was given to them by the Arcosians. I'll put that aside for the most part however, just for the sake of saying that you simply wanted to have fun drawing your character in each Saiyan stage. And as I said before, you handled each of them well artistically.

All that being said, my final qualm will probably be one that you take quite a bit of offense to, judging by your dA Name, and your clear love for this character. The one thing you missed -and indeed most people making DB OC's miss- is the fact that ALL Saiyan's are named after some sort of vegetable. Vegeta is royalty, so his family name is Vegeta, his brother's name being Tarble (Vegeta... Tarble... Vegetable...), Kakarot is a spoof on Carrot, Broly is Broccoli, etc.

Kai doesn't seem to be named after anything; it's just created to sound cool correct? That idea is compounded by the fact that the rest of your Saiyan OC's seem to have equally random names as well. The problem extends when you realize that there are already several characters in the normal canon who have the word Kai in their name. That could get pretty confusing.

Overall, this is a very admirable try, and it has a lot of work clearly invested in it. And for the most part it is a success. But a few missteps hold it back from being what it truly could be. Some may think that I'm looking too deeply into this and nitpicking a bit. But when dealing with existing canon, it's important to go in with as much knowledge as possible. Research, research, research. A balance between originality and staying true where it counts needs to be struck. This is much better than most DB OC attempts. But I think it could be a bit better <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>

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Vision gets a single star off; it's mostly complete, and carries a strong scope. But a few missteps hold it back.

Originality gets two stars off; the pose really hurts you here. It simply isn't original. The character itself is original, but there isn't much backstory in the description given, meaning -when only talking about what you've written here- it's not that difficult to make your character sound original. It just feels safe.

Technique gets just a half a star off; simply because -while the art is excellent- when full-sized, you can see a tiny bit of inconsistency. The shading is a bit too soft on the edges, and I think the lineart for the tail could be just a tiny tiny bit cleaner, while still looking furry. Maybe try a different style in how you do tails, just to reach that little bit higher fidelity when really close up.

Impact gets just a single star off; it's a strong work overall. It does the job it sets out to do, and it does it well. But those few mistakes outlined above prevent it from separating itself from the pack without first taking a bit of a closer look. I do however have to give you major props for not doing anything too extreme. No crazy tattoos, or unnatural colors that wouldn't be found on a Saiyan. You stayed away from making the major rookie mistakes of making your character "uber-badass" with foolish gary-stu tropes. For that, you are to be commended.

Anyway, I hope this has been helpful <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> Overall, great job!